Agoodday

2026-07-31 08:16:01 智文网 阅读:

One day, my deskmate came to my house.I felt very happy.

We went to a restaurant.We ordered the day's specials.

Then we went to a park, we rode a bike there and we feeded some birds.

It's the dinner time.I helped my mother set the table,she felt soexcited.

It's really a good day.

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