Tom is a naughty boy.In this summer holiday,she likes to catch the frogs from pond.And on this Sunday,he goes to the pond again and catch many frogs.He's always happy for doing that.One day,he stays at home and listens to the radio.The radio says"Protecting frogs is very important.Frogs can bring many profits to people.We must protect them and do not hurt them".Tom feels strange and he reads some passages about protecting frogs.Tom is ashamed about that.He comes to the pond.What will he do?He is not for catching frogs.He is "sprinkling" for the frogs.He wants to do something good for animals from then on.
写作思路解析
作者共情能力较强，善于运用意蕴悠长的借景抒情实现情景共生拉近和读者距离，文字简约回味绵长，读完之后余韵不散，让人久久难忘。文字亲和易懂，没有距离感。叙事贴近普通人感受，读者容易代入，传播感染力强。
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