读后感700字

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2025-03-19 20:26:31

阅读下面摘自 China Daily 的一则简讯,写一篇100词左右的读后感

River Pollution
A great deal of dead fish can be found floating on the surface of the Huaihe River(淮河), because of serious pollution this summer. In a report, Anhui Daily called on residents (居民) to help protect the river against pollution.

要求:1 必须包括对上述主要内容的感想,可以适当增减细节,使其连贯、完整。
2 词数:100左右

Chinese people are now face to a serious problem--pollution. And this problem is a little bit different from others--the goverment can not solve it by themselves. We need everyone to protect our environment. But we also know that it is very hard to call everyone to join us to protect the environment. But it seems that they have found the way to let everybody know it. In a report, Anhui Daily called on residents to help protect the river against pollution. I am so glad about it. And i believe that somewhere the pollution must stop.

写作思路解析

选材不局限宏大事件,擅长挖掘日常小事,搭配气势充沛的排比句式强化语言节奏深化表达,情感基调温和亲切,很容易拉近文章与读者之间的距离。善于从小日常寻找写作素材,素材易得,适合学生日常仿写。整篇文章清新自然,可读性很高。

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作文打分:88分(满分100)

综合点评

文章选材稳妥,能够围绕中心展开叙述,段落划分合理。行文节奏舒缓,适合记叙日常事件。缺少深度思考,感悟大多停留在表面,立意还有上升空间。

存在不足

!段落之间过渡方式比较单一,少数衔接略显生硬,上下文切换存在割裂感。内容大多停留在叙事层面,缺少更深层次思考,感悟与思考篇幅不足,文章立意深度有限。

改进建议

写作前做好提纲规划,明确主次情节,避免详略失衡。持续练习细节刻画,多用动作、神态、环境描写替代概括叙述。

作文优点

句式丰富多变,不会一直使用同一种句型。场景描写具备基础画面感,能够简单还原事发场景。

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