My best friend is Lily.She is a tall girl with black glasses. She is so nice.She often tells me jokes to make me laugh but she never makes fun of others.She often studies and play basketball with me. She is good at maths.She often get 100 in maths test.She is good at sport,too.She like playing basketball,volleyball,ski and skate.I think she is really great.I hope we will always remain friends. Lily is my best friend.Do you like her?
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