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2025-01-02 21:19:16

Often see some rates of similar age and I friends after some articles on blogs and space,found a common feature, they began to complain about interpersonal exchanges began to take a mask, hypocrisy, complaining about society began to grow dark, so, I often think that rates after we complain?

Often say that the longer the feeling between the person and person, the greater the thinking and personality will be more and more complex, often complain about the society the relationship between people will be false, but suddenly found that we ourselves also constitute a part of this false relations, does not promise a large social networks, just as some people, is also the company.

Often, some people think in the so-called dark society, with a with childlike innocence and purity of mind to face the society, want to go to low resistance to this false, but the return is a "act young" by others. And then find ourselves is so thin. And then began to wear false mask, to go to the realistic society, weave together the pieces of complex networks.

In fact, I think the word "hypocrisy" is a "mature" been demonised, think about when I was a child, the boys often not because a word or two and raised his fist and began to do; And girls, you will cry a nose to adult, said anyone bully her. That we all have a pure performance; And now we are starting to have learned patience, learn the unhappy things in mind, and not to others casually own unpleasant, this is a mature performance, but the mature, always take "hypocrisy" mask by others.

I never go to complain about the relationship between person and person becomes hypocrisy, I never go to complain about the darkness of the society, because we also constitute a part of the darkness and hypocrisy, and the darkness and hypocrisy I never feel what's wrong with it, because it is a sign of we grow up.

I think its useless to complain about these things, often can not if devout prayer to our health, because have a healthy body, it is more important than anything.

I read three now, and I often feel it does not matter a bit, not very positive to face what, I have complained about China's hard education let me tired, but, yesterday the teacher in charge of a word suddenly let I suddenly realize, "he said," again painstakingly again tired we all endure more than ten years, now there are only a few months away from the university entrance exam, why can't try again next?" Although he this sentence is not what a splendid speech, but I think this is he said when I head teacher so long since the most let me into the heart of a word. Yeah! There is nothing to complain about? What is the reason to let me continue to negative? !

Believe me! I will let all the people who study question to me regret!! Let's meet after the college entrance examination!!!!!

Rates after we together!!!!! Don't complain!!!!!

四年级:贺丞科

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