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Reading books
A famous saying goes like this: knowledge is power. And the knowledge is in the books. I think reading books is very interesting! There is a children’s song here. Take a look, it is very beautiful!
Star light
Star bright
First star I see tonight
Wish I might
Have the wish I wish tonight
It is a rhyme. It sounds spry. I'm sure you will get happy while you read this children’s song. Don’t you think it is a good song?
Certainly, reading famous books is good for us too. It's good for our writing.
I hope everyone will like reading, and the reading is good for everyone!
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