英语作文:新年

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2025-11-04 19:38:42

英语作文:新年

  1.Chinese New Year

Chinese New Year is coming and my family is very busy. Its because Chinese New Year is very special and important. We must prepare many special things to get ready for this festival.

First, will make a big New Year meal. Second, we will make Good-luck wishes. Third, we will set off firecrackers. New Year meal is delicious and we think that eating some will bring us good luck. A long time ago, Chinese people believed red color could bring our good luck too. And we set off firecrackers could frighten ghosts away.

Chinese New Year is very popular between students. Because we can have a long happy holiday.

  2.Wheres my dream

Its to visit Tiananmen Square in Beijing,in a sunny summer morning.

Oh,whats Beijing? Is she a young lady, who is teaching the chldren to sing before the building.

Whats the building,Its the Great Hall of the People,one of the most famous places in Beijing.

I hope my dream will come true tomorrow morning.

Lets go there,singing and dancing.

【英语作文:新年】

写作思路解析

语言风格清新简约,善用开阔灵动的联想想象拓宽文章边界避免文字堆砌,行文开阔大气舒展,格局从容,不受狭小视角束缚。行文干净清爽,拒绝繁杂修饰。用简洁文字表达完整想法,适合练习精简表达。

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