英语作文:六一儿童节

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2025-11-02 12:31:09

英语作文:六一儿童节

Stress on Campus

Before I came to PKU, I thought it was paradise there, because I felt so much stress when NCEE was turning the corner that I must cheat myself by something. But now I know that I actually cheated myself.

In campus, we all feel three main sorts of stress. They are study, love and life. For I have not a GF, and I consider it’s too early to think about life problems such as employment (I am only Grade One), feeling annoyed by study takes most of my time.

There is too little time for me to complete the work we need to do. And what is my fault that I have chosen too many courses to study. I miscalculated my ability. However, if I take less like what I did last term, I would waste my spare time playing computer games, sleeping, talking and fooling around.

I am still puzzled about that. But recently I even have no time to feel puzzled. There are eleven papers and two big tasks in all this term. Maybe it’s good for us to have something to do instead of giving ourselves up to daydreams. It is said that a certain amount of stress can stimulate us and increase our level of alertness.

So, don’t be worried about it. Just do it! Nike tells the answer. We should believe that our latent capacity is unlimited. It is what I want to say to some students oppressed by papers and myself. It is better to develop our abilities to deal with stress rather than to escape from it, right?

Come on!

【英语作文:六一儿童节】

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作文打分:88分(满分100)

作文优点

★构思不僵化,能够结合自身经历拓展内容,不完全套用通用范文模板。叙事节奏平稳,适合记叙日常生活类文章。

综合点评

◆主题立意准确,全文素材都服务中心思想。叙事循序渐进,层次分明。细节描写偏少,多用概括语句,场景还原能力有待提升。

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↓练习情景交融写法,借助景物烘托人物心情。梳理全文逻辑链条,保证思路连贯统一。尝试设置简单冲突制造情节起伏,摆脱平淡叙事,提升文章可读性。

存在不足

!重点与次要内容篇幅分配失衡,核心情节笔墨不足。部分段落过渡生硬,依靠简单连接词串联上下文,缺少情景过渡。

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