初中假期英语周记

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2025-10-18 11:55:09

初中假期英语周记

篇一:初中暑假英语周记

People help with each other,it is the greatest thing in the world. We should give our love to people who need help.

It was an ice day.A blind person Ben walked with a walking stick.When he was walking down the street, a little boy tumbled because of banana skin.Maybe there is something wrong with his legs. So the little boy cried sat on the floor.

Although Ben can't see anything, he walked to the little boy. Ben wanted to help the boy. So Ben said,“ Don't cry. Let me help you.” The little boy was very happy. Ben carried the little boy on the back. The little boy help Ben, too. So they were very happy.

If you see someone needs help, please help him. I'm sure you will be very happy.

篇二:初中暑假英语周记

I have rested for 10 days. In these days, I felt very bored.I didn't know to do what. Although I had a lot of things to do, I felt uncomfortable. I was ill because of the hot weather. I was tired, sleepy and had no strength.

My parents are worried about my health. In fact,it didn't matter.I was always in the room with air-conditioner and opened it in a low temperature.

So when I went out, the high temperatured is a greed tome.At last, I was ill.

篇三:初中暑假英语周记

It is very hot and wet today and is called sauna weather.

During my mom did the cooking in the kitchen, I saw her head was sweaty. I told her I could help her and she accepted.

After cooking, we were all sweaty. However, mum and I all felt happy. She said I was grow in up and be came her good assistant.

篇四:初中暑假英语周记

It was the first day of our winter holiday.All of us were very happy. Why?Because we have one months to do things we love to do. We are free. Although we have some homework. But we can finish the min several days.

And the rest time we can make good use of. My god! We have been very tired after hard

studying.In winter holidays, I want to have full sleepande at good food in order to replenish myself.Last,I will have a good rest.

【初中假期英语周记】

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