我的第英语周记

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2025-10-18 11:54:54

我的第二篇英语周记

It was the second week in school. I felt I am very stressed out. And we had much homework to do. So that made me feel very tired every day.

At school, I got up at 6 o’clock. I had to brush my teeth and wash my face. Then I must read English books because it’s good for my English study.

After that, I had to run. In my opinion, exercise every day can help us to have a healthy body, although that made me feel very tired.

Later, I went to have breakfast. I often have milk and porridge. Because they gave me the nourishment we need to stay alive and be healthy.

At about 7o’clock, I went to the classroom to have classes. I thought study can make me happy.

Time always flies fast. On the Friday, I went back home. It made me feel excited. Because my home was very warm and I can spend Mid-autumn Festival at home.

Sunday was Mid-autumn Festival. It was a very important festival in Chinese festivals. I ate two pieces of moon cake. It was delicious.

This is my meaningful week!

【我的第二篇英语周记】

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