我眼中的国庆节英语作文

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2025-09-23 11:58:47

我眼中的国庆节英语作文

My View on the Same Amount of Holiday

A seven day long holiday has flown away。 Mourning my happy hours during the vacation, I've been looking forward to winter holidays。 People around me seemed to have enjoyed the vacation, too。 Then, is it fair that people have the same amount of holidays regardless of their occupations?

Nevertheless, divergent views emerge on the matter in question。 Some people are of the opinion that laborers should have the same length of holiday。 They hold the view that people are born equal and should be treated equally。 The same amount of leisure time may eliminate the unfairness among people who might be upset psychologically if otherwise。At first sight, it may seem to be an attractive idea, but it doesn't bear much analysis。

To begin with, people do different kinds of jobs featuring different labor intensity and so the time needed to refresh their physical condition varies。 For example, blue collar workers may work longer hours before they get tired physically, while white collar workers such as doctors and teachers are more mentally stressed。 Unable to work continuously as long as those physical labor workers, white collars need more time to pull through the mental weariness than physical tiredness。All in all, people in different jobs assume different responsibilities and have different degrees of pressure。

Secondly, different tasks and duties are required for different professions, resulting in the variety of holiday periods for people in different walks of life。Some employees cannot have their legal holidays and even have to work overtime, such as policemen, construction workers and people in the service line。Those professions just can't be interrupted for a mornent;other wise the society will be in a mess。 Even for some people in the same occupation, they cannot have the same holidays entitled to them due to many factors out of human control, such as special assignments, and health conditions etc, then not to say people in different fields。

Suppose we, as teachers do, all have three months' holiday in a year。Then factories have to employ considerably more workers because some of them are enjoying happy holiday。That's obviously against the principles of doing business at lower cost and efficiency。

If we have only three days off in a year, then all the people in our country will be working day after day。 No one can squeeze time to visit those tourist resorts leisurely。 It goes without saying that the tourist trade and catering industry thus cannot develop rapidly and healthily。

Last, the development of science and technology allows the ways of work to be changed。 Computer experts make their programs, doctors give patients diagnosis and tutors give students instructions at home through optical fabric cable connections。That's how the new term SOHO bore。 In other words, the way people work is not fixed so that they need different holiday phases。

Some people need more time to recover from the fatigue of labor。And some people cannot make ends meet though they work for 365 days in a year, for whom holiday is a waste of time。

It is neither possible nor necessary for people with different jobs to have the same amount of holiday off。 Holiday is a kind of bonus, just as the Chinese idiom goes, distribution according to

work。

简评

冯佳莹同学的这篇作文思路清晰,分析丝丝入扣,是一篇非常优秀的议论文。

这篇作文的开头清新自然,通过自己对国庆假期的感受,进而联想到其他各行各业的人的想法,引出了本文的`主题,显得毫不做作。写这篇作文时,作者显然进行了深入的思考,因而分析有理有据,闪烁着作者的真知灼见和思想火花。作者的语言很出色,句式长短交错,段落层次分明,句与句之间以及句群之间的衔接都非常清晰,作者倾向于使用then,that,those等连词和代词来衔接上下文,而没有使用过多的定语从句,既使句式的长度得到了控制,又避免了中国学生常见的定语长句(尤其是非限定性定语从句)过多的弊病。尽管作者使用了一些短语,但整篇的文体并没有因此而显得过于随意,显示了作者高超的语言驾驭能力。

写作思路解析

叙事逻辑顺畅,结合真实事例借助开阔灵动的联想想象拓宽文章边界抒发内心感悟,细节暗藏丰富情绪,细微之处暗藏作者所思所想。文章内容充实饱满,情感真挚动人,不会堆砌华丽辞藻。作者立足自身观察与体验进行创作,观点清晰,思路完整,能够给予读者不少启发。

本文范文仅作写作思路参考,请勿直接照搬抄袭用于作业投稿。

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综合点评

◆素材选取丰富多元,多角度支撑中心观点,内容饱满。语句通顺,语病较少。行文缺少集中突出的高潮段落,重点不够醒目。

作文优点

★句式丰富多变,不会一直使用同一种句型。场景描写具备基础画面感,能够简单还原事发场景。

存在不足

!叙事只陈述事件结果,缺少过程细节还原,内容略显单薄。修辞运用偏少,文字感染力有限。

改进建议

↓深度挖掘事件背后蕴含的道理,不要只简单陈述事件经过。段落排布长短交错,优化页面阅读观感。

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