MyNewYearPlan200字

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2025-09-23 09:11:09

The 2018 is coming!I wish me to have fun in 2018.So I will make a New Year plan.

First, I want to correction a bad habit.

In 2017,I usually watched TV for 3 hours every weekend.It's not good for my eyes.So I want to correction this habit.I will watch TV for an hour every weekend in 2018.

Second,I want to study English carefully.Because I like learning English.I think English is important for me.I will read English every day, learn to write an English poetry and learn to how to talk with American face to face. I think I will happy.

Third,I want to take a trip.I want to go to Japan. Because Japan is beautiful.Japan has many cherry blossoms ,they are pretty.I want to take some photos for them. Japaness cartoon is a symbol of Japan .I like it .I want to understand it.And Japanness are polite.I want to make friends with them.

That's all.Thank you for your listenting.

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作文优点

叙事态度客观真诚,不夸大、不刻意煽情,文风朴实稳重。文章脉络清晰,读者可以快速理清整件事情的来龙去脉。

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!叙事过程大多简单陈述事件经过,很少加入主观感受与思考,文章思想厚度不足。全文缺少冲突与起伏,阅读过程缺少吸引力。

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段落内部理顺逻辑顺序,调整语句排布,让行文更加顺畅。重点内容着重刻画,避免所有内容平均分配笔墨。构思时提前规划亮点,集中笔墨打造令人印象深刻的场景。

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文章素材选择贴合主题,内容真实接地气,叙事节奏舒缓,能够静下心来逐步推进情节。作者善于观察生活,把亲身经历转化为写作内容,情感流露自然,不刻意煽情。但部分段落表达偏平淡,缺少亮点句子,难以形成记忆点。

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