The legend of Nuwa
Long long ago a goddess Nuwa, had magic powers but she was very lonely. The Earth was beautiful but silent. She flew and flew in the peaceful sky until she was tired and she stopped at a nearby river. She looked into the water and saw her reflection. An idea came to her.
She grabbed a handful of wet mud and made it into a doll. The doll became alive. Nuwa decided to make more and more. She called the doll-Human. The goddess then had another idea. She divided them into men and women. That way, they could form a family and have children.
Years went by, when suddenly……the sky collapsed! Rain poured as storm came thundering from the sky and flooded the mountains. Seeing her children drown, Nuwa made rafts for them. She decided to fix the sky insteadtated of watching her children drown and die. She used some colorful, round rocks and flew to the sky. Still there was a big gap. Next, she cut off the turtle’s legs and placed them up. After all this hard-work done, she felt exhausted but still kept going. With all her spirit, the sky was mended and her children were safe.
附上指导老师评语：
Dear Elsa
What a lovey story! You have really captured the wonderful time when human beings were created. I especially love your description of the storm.
Congratulations!
很久以前，一位女神女娲，拥有魔法力量，但她非常孤独。地球很美，但很安静。她在宁静的天空中飞来飞去，直到她累了，她在附近的一条河边停了下来。她看向水中，看到了自己的倒影。她萌生了一个想法。
她抓起一把湿漉漉的泥巴，把它做成一个洋娃娃。娃娃活了过来。女娲决定做越来越多的。她称娃娃为人类。然后女神有了另一个想法。她把他们分为男人和女人。这样，他们就可以组建一个家庭并生孩子。
岁月流逝，突然间......天空坍塌了！倾盆大雨，暴风雨从天而降，淹没了群山。看到她的孩子淹死，女娲为他们做了木筏。她决定修复天空，而不是看着她的孩子溺水和死亡。她用了一些五颜六色的圆形岩石，飞向天空。仍然有很大的差距。接下来，她砍掉了的腿，把它们放了起来。在完成所有这些艰苦的工作之后，她感到筋疲力尽，但仍然继续前进。她全神贯注地，天空得到了修复，她的孩子安全了。
亲爱的艾尔莎 多么可爱的故事！你真的捕捉到了人类被创造的美好时光。我特别喜欢你对风暴的描述。祝贺！
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